help me So I was set to write a Shakespearean style sonnet, written in iambic pentameter and I don't know if I got it right. Help me: Such dark arrays within your eyes do hold Secrets behind closed doors do find thy mind Your place: your fall from which has been foretold: But oh, I wish for love to age come blind. Alas, my life, thou'rt be beyond my reach Mine eyes doth see more than my soul Years do separate us: words, thoughts in each. Within your work muffled whispers of coal Darkness dusted above duties of thine, A rose so fresh shan't see the horrors thou'st seen. Thou workst for a man: his mastery also to mine. Tho' thou be far over me, alone it seems. My love so true: vetoed. I cannot withhold. One day, I yearn for my love shall give as gold. Criticism is always appreciated... constructive please. If anyone's reading this k
I'm not no poetry master and I really don't know much about poetry... but it looks pretty good to me.
It's pretty cool that you wrote it in Iambic Pentameter (I know what that is from my Shakespeare class), and I like the use of Old-English words like "thy" and "thou'rt". It's really quite nice. I think you did a great job and did it correctly.
